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I agree with Snoink. You should probably stick to your message. There a few place where there unnessicary periods and no capitalizzation, but, it's poerty, so it could be purposeful. ...

Julia sat in tears so desperate to be able to think and focus. But it was no use. No matter how hard she tried she couldn’t focus on her work. ...

I like the sentence flow. But you could be a little more direct.

I don't believe so. Is Gerard Way hot?

I read it. I thought it was very nice. I generally don't read stuff on here, because the majority of it makes me want to fall asleep which I am ...

I think it would be really cool if you posted the origional black and white pictures. What art program did you use? I am always looking for new ones because ...

YWS is hungry for lots of new stuff. The moderators keep the members in funky mood and enjoy global diversity throughout the forum when dinosaurs unleash absolutly unholy noises that ...

I always thought that gossip was really really cool. I still do.

LOL Nice :D I like the ending very much :D

First of all, I'm not saying Literature bores me. I'm saying IF I get bored again, which is unlikely. That's twisting my words. And, I am Nikki. I was speaking ...

Here, it's short, and I might add more lines. If i'm ever bored in Literature again... In this mirror My reflection shows me Everything That I don't want to be.

I would lick... GERARD WAY FROM MY CHEMICAL ROMANCE ON HIS TOUNGUE. Because he;s REALLY HOT! What? He's not a member... Then I would lick... THE PERSON WHO MADE THIS ...

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A few optional suggestions... The blond soldier raised a flat hand to his eye lids and saluted his partners, that were still standing to the left and right, guarding my ...

Hmmm... It's kind of confusing, and you don't really GET into any of the characters. You defentily need to build up the characters WAAAAAAY more, describing physically and mentally. The ...